KS3 · English

Writing a Gothic opening

Same moon, two different verbs. One makes it harmless, the other makes your stomach drop. Can you tell which is which?

English · Writing fiction

Would you trust this word in a Gothic opening?

Gothic description is meant to feel ominous and foreboding. Where does each word belong?

Still to sort

Fits the ominous atmosphere (0)

Its connotations suggest threat, control or being trapped.

Where the line is: Dramatic is not enough. It has to bring the right feelings to mind.

Wrong connotations (0)

Too positive, or it doesn't suggest a threat.

Where the line is: A word can sound impressive and still be wrong. Check what it brings to mind and where you usually meet it.

Neutral: only works if its use is made clear (0)

It can be used positively or negatively.

Where the line is: Neutral words aren't banned. They just need the writer to make clear how they are being used.

8 of 8 still to sort.

Every word carries a shadow. Sort each word by what it brings to mind, then read why.

Semantic fields

What is a semantic field actually for?

Mara has been told to plan a semantic field of restriction and control before she writes her Gothic opening. She isn't sure why.

Which idea is closest to what you think right now?

Planning my words first gives me more ambitious, less repetitive vocabulary, and it can help me write figurative language such as an extended metaphor.A semantic field is a stand-alone technique I use to show off. It isn't connected to anything else I write.A semantic field means using the same word over and over so the mood really sinks in.Planning is a waste of time. I'll just write and drop in impressive words as they come to me.

How sure are you?

I'm sureI think soI'm guessing

Planning my words first gives me more ambitious, less repetitive vocabulary, and it can help me write figurative language such as an extended metaphor.

This matches the evidence

Yes. A semantic field is a group of words related in meaning, so planning one before you write hands you a stock of ambitious words to choose from. It can also help you include figurative language such as an extended metaphor.

A semantic field is a stand-alone technique I use to show off. It isn't connected to anything else I write.

This is a common misconception

It's tempting to treat it as a trick to show off, but a semantic field is not necessarily a stand-alone method. It works through your word choices, and it can help you build figurative language such as an extended metaphor.

A semantic field means using the same word over and over so the mood really sinks in.

This is a common misconception

It's the other way round. A semantic field is a group of different words with related meanings, so having one planned helps you be less repetitive, not more.

Planning is a waste of time. I'll just write and drop in impressive words as they come to me.

This is a common misconception

Words that turn up on the spot are often the first ones you thought of. It's useful to plan vocabulary within the semantic field before writing, so the right words are ready when you need them.

A semantic field is a planning tool for your word choices. Plan it first, and let it improve your vocabulary and your figurative language.

An invented scene: arriving at an old house

Sight onlyvsMultisensory

Imagery is words that create a clear image in the reader's head. Same scene, two versions. Which one pulls you in?

Focus

Looks

Sight only

A tall grey house stood at the end of the lane, its windows dark.

Multisensory

Still there: a tall grey house at the end of the lane, its windows dark.

The insight

Sight stays in both versions. Multisensory description adds to what the scene looks like; it doesn't replace it.

Smells

Sight only

Nothing. The reader can only see it.

Multisensory

The air smelled of damp stone and old, shut-in dust.

Feels

Sight only

Nothing. The reader can only see it.

Multisensory

The gate felt cold and slick under her palm.

Sounds

Sight only

Nothing. The scene is silent.

Multisensory

A shutter knocked softly against the wall.

Tastes

Sight only

Nothing. The reader can only see it.

Multisensory

Every breath left a taste like cold coins on her tongue.

Figurative language

Sight only

The windows were dark.

Multisensory

The windows watched her like patient, dark eyes.

Building tension

Where is the tension coming from?

An invented Gothic opening. Tap each underlined phrase to read the teacher's note.

At the very end of the crooked lane, Mara stopped.

The gate's latch was a curl of black iron no bigger than her thumb, pitted with tiny holes and crusted with orange rust that flaked at her touch.

Something tall and narrow stood against the sky, grey as old ash, with dark wells for eyes and a crooked point where its head should be. It was the house.

Focus a highlighted phrase to read its analysis.

Reading “At the very end of the crooked lane,”

Fronted adverbial

What to notice

Notice the comma. A comma follows a fronted adverbial.

Effect

It lengthens the sentence and delays the action. We wait through the whole lane before we find out that Mara simply stopped.

Focused phrase “At the very end of the crooked lane,”. technique Fronted adverbial. Notice the comma. A comma follows a fronted adverbial.. effect: It lengthens the sentence and delays the action. We wait through the whole lane before we find out that Mara simply stopped.

Your turn

Plan it, write it, mark it, edit it

An invented task: someone arrives at an empty school after dark.

First, list four words from a semantic field of restriction and control. Then write a Gothic opening of three or four sentences about someone arriving at an empty school after dark. Finally, re-read it and change any word that doesn't fit. [5 marks]

Your answer

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The mark scheme

Planned: you listed words from a semantic field of restriction and control before you wrote. (1 mark)
Word choice: your words have connotations that fit an ominous, foreboding atmosphere. (1 mark)
Senses: you describe at least two senses beyond sight (how it smells, feels, sounds or tastes). (1 mark)
Tension: you use one technique: a very small detail described in full, information withheld until the end, or a fronted adverbial followed by a comma. (1 mark)
Edited: you re-read your writing and changed any word whose connotations did not fit. (1 mark)

Model answer

Plan: confined, smothered, dominated, imprisoned. After the last bell, the school dominated the empty street, and the dark smothered every window. The corridor smelled of chalk dust and cold floors, and the door handle was slick under her palm. Down the hall, something rattled once. Edit: my first draft said 'the breathtaking school'. I changed it to 'dominated' because 'breathtaking' is too positive.

Good Gothic writing is chosen, not accidental: plan the words, add senses, build tension, then re-read and edit.

WHAT YOU'VE LEARNED

A quick recap of today's lesson.

Choose words for what they suggest, not just what they mean.

What you need to know

Gothic description aims to create an ominous, foreboding and thrilling atmosphere, so every word has to fit that mood.
A semantic field is a group of words related in meaning, and words in one field can share similar connotations.
Connotations are the associations a word brings to mind: its underlying meaning, on top of its literal meaning.
Have a goYour friend Jas insists a word's connotations are just its dictionary definition. Jas is confidently wrong. What has Jas missed?
Connotations are the associations a word brings to mind, on top of its literal meaning.
Every word has an underlying meaning as well as its literal one, and connotations are that underlying part.
A semantic field of restriction, control and oppression is typical of the Gothic and can leave readers feeling claustrophobic and trapped.
Check where a word is usually used: 'loomed' suits a threatening, physically dominant moon, but 'hovered' (nervous people, birds) does not.
'Breathtaking' is too positive for an ominous mood; 'overwhelming' can go with joy or grief, so make its meaning clear.
Have a goWhich one word is wrong for a Gothic mood in 'The breathtaking tower rose above her', and why?
'Breathtaking'. Its connotations are too positive for an ominous atmosphere.
Being dramatic isn't enough. A word has to bring the right feelings to mind for the mood you want.
Plan your vocabulary within the semantic field before you write: it helps you use more ambitious, less repetitive words.
Make imagery vivid with more than sight (smell, feel, sound, taste) and with figurative language that relates the scene to familiar things.
Tension can come from describing a very small detail in full, or from withholding information until the end of a description.
A fronted adverbial, followed by a comma, lengthens the sentence and delays the action, which builds tension.
Have a goA classmate writes 'In the dark cellar the candle flickered.' The fronted adverbial is 'In the dark cellar'. Where does the missing comma go?
Straight after 'cellar': 'In the dark cellar, the candle flickered.'
A comma always follows a fronted adverbial, and that opening phrase is what delays the action.

The big picture

A Gothic opening works by atmosphere. Choose words whose connotations feel ominous (a planned semantic field of restriction and control), make the scene vivid with more than sight, and build tension with small details, withheld information and fronted adverbials. Then re-read and edit any word that doesn't fit.

Key points

1Choose words for the associations they carry (their connotations), not just their literal meaning.

2A planned semantic field of restriction and control builds a foreboding, claustrophobic, trapped atmosphere.

3Vivid imagery uses more than sight, plus figurative language that relates the scene to familiar things.

4Tension can come from a tiny detail described in full, information withheld until the end, and a fronted adverbial followed by a comma.

5Plan, draft, then re-read and edit any word that doesn't fit.

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Worked example

Problem

Rewrite the flat sentence 'The old library was big and quiet.' as a Gothic opening.

⚠ Watch out

Picking any dramatic-sounding word. A word only fits if its connotations and usual context match the ominous mood: 'breathtaking' is dramatic but too positive, and 'overwhelming' needs its meaning made clear.

🧠

Memory hook

Every word has a shadow. Before you let one in, ask what else it brings to mind.

✓

Check yourself

A pupil writes: 'The overwhelming house hovered over the lane.' Which two words would you check first, and what would you ask about each one?

Flashcards

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What is a semantic field?

A group of words that are related in meaning (they all share similar meaning).

What are connotations?

The associations a word brings to mind. A word has an underlying meaning as well as its literal meaning.

What mood does a semantic field of restriction, control and oppression create in Gothic writing?

A foreboding atmosphere that can make the reader feel claustrophobic and trapped.

Name four words from a semantic field of control and restriction.

Any four of: smothered, strangled, dominated, intimidating, imprisoned, threatened, confined, enslaved.

What does 'overwhelming' need before it fits an ominous description?

Its meaning made clear, because it can go with joy or with grief.

What two things should you check before choosing a word?

The context in which it is usually used, and whether its connotations match the impression you want.

Give two ways a semantic field helps a writer.

More ambitious vocabulary and less repetition. It can also help include figurative language such as extended metaphors.

What is imagery?

Words used to create a clear image in the reader's head. Vivid imagery produces strong, clear images.

Which senses can a multisensory description use?

How a scene looks, smells, feels, sounds and tastes.

How does figurative language create vivid imagery?

By relating parts of a scene to things the reader will be familiar with.

How does describing a very small detail build tension?

Describing it quite comprehensively holds the reader on it and builds tension.

How does withholding information build tension?

Revealing what is being looked at only at the end makes the reader piece the description together.

What does a fronted adverbial do to a sentence?

It lengthens the sentence and delays the action, which builds tension.

What should you do with a word that doesn't fit when you re-read your draft?

Edit it: amend the vocabulary so the writing is more effective.

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